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Post by Destral on 2010-10-11, 15:06

Yeppers, Ive officially begun working on a page for Red Squad on the Star Trek Expanded Universe Wiki. Its still incomplete but I am working as quickly as I can to get it done.

http://stexpanded.wikia.com/wiki/Star_Trek:_Red_Squad

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Post by Vedic on 2010-10-12, 04:51

you make the Red Squad universe sound awesome.
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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by leewatson1 on 2010-10-12, 13:13

Hopefully yours wont get deleted, like my page on BM2,3
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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by Darkwing on 2010-10-12, 14:03

Fortunately they removed the sources warning, however, with the writing style, it's way too loose and casual, for instance, you use terms such as "sure enough". Write it more encyclopedia style, almost mechanically, like you're writing a formal essay. For example, here's what you have:

"The project was started in early 2009, but due to working on other projects, Kroznuski's work on Red Squad went stagnant shortly after Episode 1 was released. In April 2010 however, he stated that he would begin work on the project again, and sure enough, two months later, Episode 2 was released on his channel in two parts.

Episode 2 was rendered in much better quality than Episode 1, and told much more of a story. "At first it was just a simple animation thing," Kroznuski stated. "It was just something I wanted to do to try to get myself to learn more about 3d animating. Since then however, I think it's evolved into something much bigger than that. It has a story now, characters, and as people have stated it's a machinima, I think its becoming bigger than that too."

Kroznuski started to work on an Episode 2.5, which was to detail the launch of a refitted Enterprise - E, however this was scrapped in favor of a trailer for episodes 3 and 4.

Chris Cameron, who has collaborated with Kroznuski on other projects, has also contributed to this project, creating a new trailer and a new title sequence for episodes 3 and 4. Kroznuski has also received help from the TrekUnited forums on this project.

Episode 3 is planned to have character animation "and a few other surprises." "

Instead, try something like:

Star Trek: Red Squad began development in the spring of 2009. Several months of work produced the pilot episode of the web series (insert Ep 1 citation), however, the creator, Chris Kroznuski, soon shifted focus from Red Squad to another project entitled "Earth-Link Zero" (insert ELZ citation). Red Squad remained dormant for approximately one year until Earth-Link Zero was shelved due to lack of resources (insert A:M citation).

Shortly after the end of the Earth-Link Zero project, it was announced by Kroznuski that work would resume on Star Trek: Red Squad in April of 2010. Utilizing higher quality models supplied by fan modelers, mostly on the Bridge Commander forum and improving on his animation technique using 3D Studio Max, Episode 2 of Red Squad began production. Released in two parts on YouTube, Episode 2 received much higher praise by the general fan community and showed a definite improvement in the overall style and tone of the production. (Insert Ep 2 Citation)

Since the release of Episode 2 in June 2010, Star Trek: Red Squad has undergone larger improvements once again. Fans have been considering Red Squad a machinima of sorts due to its lack of physical characters and trademark style of only showing the starships. (Insert Machinima Citation) Continuing in its current style, Kroznuski began development of an Episode 2.5, to bridge the gap between episodes 2 and 3. However, it was decided to abandon the idea of Episode 2.5 and simply continue with Episode 3. (Insert Citation)

Episode 3 is currently in production with footage available on YouTube of the first act. Other footage from this episode can be seen in the trailer released by Chris Cameron in September 2010. (Insert Citation) Episode 3 once again promises to expand upon that which was created in the previous episode and in an attempt to make it less of a machinima, voice overs will be created for the characters as well as physical character animation using the iClone software.

Star Trek: Red Squad has begun to garner the interest of the general Star Trek fan world by having an article written on TrekUnited.com. Red Squad is also one of the main project features of the Flash Trek: Unofficial Forum and was featured on the Earth-Link Zero forum which has since been abandoned. (Insert Citations of TU, FT and ELZ)

There is one more proposed episode for Star Trek: Red Squad to follow up the events of Episode 3 and to close off the series. Both episodes 3 and 4 will utilize a new title sequence, created by Chris Cameron using footage from Red Squad and music from Two Steps From Hell. (Insert citation) As well as the finale episode, there is a proposed sequel web series entitled Star Trek: Infestation which will further on the adventures of the Red Squad characters. Star Trek Infestation has been a concept in development since early 2009. (Insert YT citation)

There, try something like that (you can use that if you wish) but just note how it's more professional sounding and if the entire article uses that type of tone, you'll most likely lose that warning at the top. If you do use what I wrote, remember to turn off the italics and colour Razz

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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by Darkwing on 2010-10-12, 14:05

And remember to have links to the 3DS website, the AM website because of the ELZ refs, the Bridge Commander site and whatever other sites that you have used along the way such as iClone

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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by Darkwing on 2010-10-12, 14:14

Also remember, for citations like ELZ being shelved, use specific links such as:

http://www.hash.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=38258

Oh...and you do know how to do citations right? You don't put the URL in those brackets where I put (Insert Citation)

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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by Destral on 2010-10-12, 18:46

Not really, no Smile Im looking it up though, and am updating the wiki page now.

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Re: Red Squad on Star Trek Expanded Universe Wikia

Post by Darkwing on 2010-10-13, 01:31

Right, well look up the MLA format for citations, it's what we use. Now with Wiki it'll be a bit different cause it's all url based, but simply, you put the full reference at the bottom of the page like normal, include URL, Creator of the Site, Last Updated, that type of stuff. Then in the actual bracketed citation, put the title of site ie: (FT:TUF). Now mind you, that's not the exact MLA format, but you're not writing an english essay here so it doesn't have to be completely accurate Smile

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